Thursday, 22 August 2013

Motions of Emotion

With scabs that covered craters on the surface,
she camouflaged the scars that ran deep.
Her skin prickled into pearly white mountains
as vagrant thoughts left her gravitating towards him.
Drawing attention through tidal waves,
she influenced seventy percent
of what he was made of,
but let go of the imaginary reigns
that controlled him.
He scoffed away, sullen and adamant,
to create a distinct new revolution,
to stand out from the other eight,
to leave a mark in the universe.
So she stood there at a little distance,
trying hard to hold her ground.
and silenced her irrational impulses,
by orbiting around his space.

Because he was her world.

** For 3WW*** Photo courtesy LayoutSparks


  1. Oh, delightful! I love the use of words like "craters" and "gravitating" and "revolution" and "orbiting" — all implying the moon without saying it.
    And the last line sums it up!

  2. A woman's love is all encompassing. A feel a spiritual thread to your poem.

  3. Nice povs here...enjoy the personifications you employed. :)

  4. Feels very fresh with all words you used here. Love your poem!
    ' silenced her irrational impulses,
    by orbiting around his space.'
    and how often we're each other world...for good or for bad..

  5. He scoffed away, sullen and adamant.

    Oh, the moon certainly is being labeled with this challenge! :) Nicely done.

  6. Irrational impulses ... we are all guilty of having them. Loved your poem.

  7. Wow! I love it! I couldn't write a favorite part because all of it shines!

  8. kay, found this completely adorable: yet there is so much depth here at the same time. I really appreciate your use of imagery (scabs and prickly white mountains for instance) in creating the earth and moon as their own characters in a sort of gothic soap opera.

    Well done and thanks so much for posting to the OUt of Standard prompt.

  9. Great the last line.

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  13. Wow. This is just wonderfully done.