Saturday, 14 July 2012

She Waited

Photo Credit: Maria Sardari

So she’d wait there after midnight, behind a curtained wall frame
Stealthily whispering whistles to call out my name
Dragging fearful memories with every stride
I’d take refuge in an old cupboard and hide
Peeking through the chink as she came

Her silhouette would burn with a platinum flame
Long soggy hair-strands would veil her shame
Soft sobs broke into screams as she cried
So she’d wait there after midnight.

This was the home she had hoped to claim
One that was etched with her future last name
Black-sooted droplets of tears had dried
She had longed to be an army man’s bride
He’d promised her the stars, but he never came
So she’d wait there after midnight.

* For imaginary garden with real toads
** My attempt at Rondeau Poetry rhyming, dedicated to Friday the Thirteenth 


  1. Your poem portrayed very well the sadness of waiting and waiting for someone who never came. The words of the refrain really pack a strong punch when they conclude the poem!

    Could you possibly eliminate the need for word verification? It makes it difficult for people to easily comment and truly serves no purpose.

    1. Thank you! Appreciate it :)
      Also, thanks for pointing out the word verification bit. I've just changed my settings. Have a lovely weekend :D

  2. So sad... I especially like the last stanza.

  3. This reads like an old classical tale written by Jane Austen.......permeated with mood and atmosphere. Loved it.

    1. Whoa!! Now that's a real honour! Thank you so much.
      Huge Austen fan :)

  4. This is spectacular ... it also fits beautifully with today's prompt over at Magpie Tales.

    1. Oh sure! This works for this image as well. Thanks for sharing this picture prompting blog. Will look at it for inspiration :)

  5. I love the way this piece flowed! Black-sooted droplets of tears had dried but love keeps her waiting

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